Note from author: This post is republished from last December 7, 2016, another reminder of what freedom costs and how words well written can change the world.
I’m all about self-editing. I’m all about encouraging writers to write that first draft, get down everything they want to say, then go back and massage the words. It’s at that point that you determine if you’re saying what you really want to say. It’s at that point that you can search to replace a blah word with the perfect word, play with some alliteration, try an unexpected metaphor or simile.
I teach a Public Speaking class this semester, and I encourage my students to play with words as they write their speeches. I also require them to watch and study several great speeches.
I mean, what if Martin Luther King, Jr. had said, “I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by what they look like but by who they are.”
Instead, look at this brilliant alliteration: “I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their character.”
Now that’s a memorable line!
Speaking of memorable lines, we have a great example of President Franklin Roosevelt self-editing a speech that made it one of the greatest speeches of all time. This year, December 7 will be the 75th anniversary of the attack on Pearl Harbor. The surprise military strike by Japan on the United States Naval Base at Pearl Harbor, Hawaii, resulted in the loss of 2,403 American lives; the sinking of battleships, cruisers, and destroyers; and the destruction of 188 aircraft.
The next day, December 8, 1941, President Roosevelt addressed a joint session of Congress. The first draft of his speech began this way (italics mine):
Yesterday, December 7, 1941, a date which will live in world history, the United States of America was simultaneously and deliberately attacked by naval and air forces of the Empire of Japan.
Instead, by editing just two words in this first line, FDR gave us these stirring words (again with my italics):
Yesterday, December 7, 1941 — a date which will live in infamy — the United States of America was suddenly and deliberately attacked by naval and air forces of the Empire of Japan.
You can see a copy of the typed speech with FDR’s handwritten edits here at the National Archives website. On the three pages, you’ll see several places where he crossed out typed words, wrote in new ones, wrote in new words, and crossed those out.
In the end, on that day of great shock and fear, the president offered strong words of resolve that united a nation.
So there you have it. Now watch the actual speech. And remember those who died 75 years ago on December 7 and those who subsequently died fighting for freedom on both sides of the globe–in Europe and in the Pacific.
And remember the power of words.
Whatever you write, take the time to edit. Go back and look at every word, making sure it is the right word, the best word, the perfect word.
It will make all the difference.
6 thoughts on “FDR, December 7, and Self-Editing”
Wow, Linda. Best article yet! Concise, to the point, and quite well done!
Thanks for the 12/7/41 reminder, too!
Glad you enjoyed it!
What a great example of self-editing! Thanks for sharing.
Thanks, fellow editor!
Linda, you are so right! Great article. I recall my first journalism class at Ball State University. In an effort to impress us with using the right verb, in that instance, our professor made us go through the sports page of the newspaper, and substitute every verb we could think of to describe beating one’s opponent in a game. We thought of words like trounced–and many others. That exercise opened the door for other word usages, which I use yet today.
What a great exercise! Too often we lean on that familiar word when we have a whole dictionary full to use! I love this idea.